Please help me out. I worked this morning on a front-and-back pandemic flu flyer, adapted from the Pandemic Flu Awareness materials. I had to cut some stuff, of course, to get everything I wanted to fit. I’ll have to photocopy and distribute this myself, so I had to keep it manageably short. Please look over it and make suggestions. Do you see any typos? (I hate typos, and the older I get, the blinder I get.) Do you see any inaccuracies? Any potential errors in strategy? Any possible improvements that don’t require more paper? I don’t have an image to replace the default image that came on the template I used - I think the one on the flyer kind of works, but am open to other possibilities. Anyway, timely feedback would be appreciated. I’ll be making copies tomorrow.
You can find the PDF here.
Could not open the page
Try this. I don’t think the link is so long as to gum up the works: http://mindspinner.net/docs/panfluflyer.pdf
same here…could not open the page…would like to give you feedback
OK, thanks
I read it and thought is was excellent. Can you add more websites such as CDC and WHO. It may give the flyer more weight.
Should you mention that there is currently no warning for the first 5 days that people have the flu and that the person next to you could be giving you the flu and not know it? Maybe too scary on not enough room.
Anyway it is great as it is and I might print some out myself if ti downloads correctly.
Great job. This is the first thing I have seen that is ready to go now, easy for us non computer geeks to print out and not overly complicated.
Anyone else?
Hi InKy, thank you for all your work.
I find the flyer to be very clear, informative and not overwhelming. I did not find any typos. I actually think the image of the climber works great for Colorado. People here are so into climbing, that even if the words “Pandemic Flu” will not draw their attention, the person ice climbing will (whatever it takes, I would say).
I will make copies and distribute those to as many people as I can. Thanks again.
Should you say that 80% of those dying are under 40 years of age? This may get the atention on the younger moms and dads. I am not sure about the statistic, but it is something like that.
No matter what, it if you do not change a thing it is perfect and I also found no typos.
Let us know if this is the final product.
Thanks, both of you. I will follow up on all suggestions I get today (insofar as I can squeeze them in) and post a final version tonight.
Beautiful! It is printed on a medium-gray background, though, so I am wondering how well it Xeroxes. Is it easily readable?
I made a one-page alert for Pandemic Flu Awareness Week, but was told it had to be 1/4 page size for me to leave a pile of them on tables. Ouch. Scissors and tape time, I guess, with no skills on the computer.
Hi Inky, I just have one minor thought. Is the graphic of the person on the mountain in the public domain? You have to have permission before you use a picture and even more so a picture of an individual. I know you are not going to sell anything with this, and the person who took the picture and the person in the picture would have to want to come after you for their use….I don’t think that given context either is likely.
I think it looks good…. you did a good job. My thought below…
Under the Question: Is bird flu the same as pandemic flu?
My suggestion would be: 1st sentence change to
Although birds and poultry are infected by many avian influenza viruses, the current generalized term “Bird flu” most often refers to the H5N1 virus, currently circulating in wild birds, domestic poultry, certain mammals and on occasion, humans.
Under the question: What is the current situation?
My suggestion would be: 1st sentence change to:
The World Health Organization (WHO) has acknowledged occasional human to human transmission, although the spread has not yet been ‘sustained’ transmission.
Good job!
Thanks, FloridaGirl. I used what you’ve said, revised only for concision.
Dude, I can’t find anything indicating that the template image is copyrighted. I’ve looked through the help docs that come with Apple’s Pages program.
Jane, I think it will photocopy reasonably well on a good photocopier. If I find out otherwise, I’ll do some tweaking.
NJ Jeeper - I need to find those WHO graphs regarding mortality.
InKy, Very, very good — very professional looking, concise — you should be proud of the effort you’ve put into it. Hope word gets back to you that it getting lots of attention from the public.
I have them bookmarked as a favorite on my computer at work.
Someone who knows where they are please help InKy.
I will look, not sure if they were here, or Flutrackers or Curevents. Will look, but if you know please drop them in for InKy.
Funny thing I could not find the colored graphs, but I did find something on flutrackers that had a link to flukickie.com
It had a table that showed 70% fatalitiers under age 40. But I do not know where it is on the forum
Mods, please help out here.
http://www.wpro.who.int/sites/csr/data/data_Graphs.htm
They have removed thier last graph, cases by age and outcome, and replaced it with a chart. The third and last one was always the most powerful ones.
Found it! H5N1 Fatality Table by Age and Country
link repaired - pogge
temp man You da man!!
Good job,
Some editorial commentary.
Did Nabarro say “we have” or did he ever say “we only have”? A time qualifer would make the statement more powerful if he said it.
I can’t find the original quote. Reporters seem to have summarized, lifting only the phrase “God given time,” so that’s what I did as well. If anybody has the whole quote, please let me know!
Thank you, temp man and NJ Jeeper. It’s great to have all this help!
Just to correct my statistic. This is the statistic from the fluwkickie table:
70% of all fatalities were 25 years old or less. More than half below 20 years old.
Also missing beginning quote on leavitt’s statement.
I would also include at least one more web site, but do not agree with the CDC site as it just passes you on to pandemicflu.gov.
Aslo, in your what should I do paragraph, if it were me I would bold a suggestion or quote of someone saying 2 weeks minimum food and water, 3 months or longer if you want to feel safe. Something along the lines of….
While you may have heard that some agencies have recommended a three day supply of food and water, world experts strongly suggest a 2 week supply is the absolute minimum, with three months or longer the prefered amount in case the pandemic is as severe as many scientists expect.
InKY,
It is excellent. I intend to make many copies and distribute them at work. Thanks very much for your effort. I offer three very minor grammatical suggestions:
Replace
Bird flu refers to the current H5N1 virus circulating in wild birds, poultry, certain mammals, and on occasion humans.
With
Bird flu refers to the current H5N1 virus circulating in wild birds, poultry, certain mammals and, on occasion, humans.
(paired commas to offset the parenthetical element “on occasion”)
Replace
Right now, the best estimates are that it will take at least six months from the start of a pandemic for a vaccine to be available, and even then, there likely will not be enough to go around at first.
With
Right now, the best estimates are that it will take at least six months from the start of a pandemic for a vaccine to be available and, even then, it is likely that there will not be enough to go around at first.
(paired commas to offset the parenthetical element “even then”)
Replace
Share this message with your family, friends, coworkers, and neighbors.
With
Share this message with your family, friends, co-workers, and neighbors.
(either is correct but co-worker is etymologically more accurate)
Thanks Dennis. I will make corrections and post an updated version.
Er, I should have written “Thanks, Dennis.” ;→.
I’ve made revisions based on everybody’s suggestions and put in the six-week recommendation, which I had inadvertently deleted from the last draft. There are small changes made to eliminate extra words.
Dear InKy -
Very nice job. Excellent job. Terrific job. Outstanding job.
Some editorial corrections:
page 1 titles: FULL CAPS are more difficult to read than upper-lower case combinations. Plz consider changing your UC sections to
Be Prepared for PANDEMIC FLU
and
The last time we were closer to a PANDEMIC, we were IN A PANDEMIC
or something like that.
Typos, p. 1:
Insert opening quotes on Michael Leavitt quote
Omi citation: Make Regional Director first letter upper case to go with the other titles on the page
Webster citation:
insert comma after Hospital and before Memphis
P. 2:
bottom line, first column - pandemic went from 1918 thru third wave in 1920
first para, second column - change “killing on average 58%” to “killing an average of 58%”
Q What about the promising vaccines…. (it’s a double entendre) change to something like “What about the new vaccines….”
A, same question: change last line to read: …may not protect us against tomorrow’s pandemic flu.
Last column: reduce the font size of the last paragraph (Information in this brochure…), and either box it or put in a line separating it from the answer to the immediate question preceding. That will give you more space to:
Add a website for the WHO
Change the last sentence of the “current situation” question to read: “The disease has already adapted to ….”
Last question: drop upper case on Pandemic Influenza Awareness to lower case
Last answer: change last line to read: Those will be the communities be prepared to cope.
Saddletramp, I made most of these changes and a few more (see second draft), but I haven’t yet figured out how to overcome the all caps setting on the template. I’m not as familiar with Pages as I am with Word, but Pages is what I have on the laptop I’m using.
Forgot about the template issue. Dont worry about it. It’s fine as is. Very nice job.
InKy:
Page 1: You still need to add the opening quotation mark on Leavitt’s quote. You have closing marks but not the ones that go before “Any community….”
I’ve made a slight correction to the Leavitt quote, and I’m going to leave it now as is because otherwise I’ll sit here and obsess all day and not get anything else done, with very little additional benefit to be gained.
great job, InKy. One question: how do you plan to distribute them — only to friends, neighbors, colleagues, or to strangers as well? Has anyone just left flyers in public places, sort of as “random acts of information”, hoping that a few will be read and taken seriously by people who pick them up?
Thanks everybody! I’ve posted a final version on the thread Pan Flu Flyer To Go, as well as below.
Delphina - I haven’t thought through any ingenious plans. I’m going to get up very early in the morning and put them in all the newspaper boxes in my subdivision. I’ll try leaving some at local groceries stores and pharmacies. I don’t know what the reception will be - haven’t tried this before. I’ll also be attaching the “lite” version (smaller file) to emails to try to get the word out via the Web.
I’m also removing draft copies now so that only the final ones get distributed.
For printed flyers: http://mindspinner.net/docs/panfluflyerfinal.pdf
For email attachment: http://mindspinner.net/docs/panfluwebflyer.pdf
Great job!!!!I plan on printing it and giving it to everone i know!Then i can say to myself thay been warned!And thank you.
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